Writing - Answer This GED Essay Prompt on Your Blog by Tuesday
What one experience has significantly changed your life for the better? Why? Use specific examples from your personal knowledge, experiences and observations to support your answer. Try to respond in about 250 words and/or five paragraphs, including an introduction, body and conclusion. Use the chart from my October 30 post to this blog for structural guidelines if you find them helpful. Remember, your writing will be scored holistically, not exclusively focused on punctuation or grammar.
The biggest experience that impacted my life the most would be getting shot by a person that I never would have doubted to be my friend. I't seems crazy,but as you read further I will explain how it changed my life for the better, even though I experienced such a tramatic ordeal with this person. I've known him for almost ten years went to school with him,always chilled with him,he is my children's cousin. that really changed the way I consider people my friend. If he needed anything if I had it I would help him out,I would pick up his kids so they could play with mine. When ever I would go to the club, games,had a fight or was just chilling most of the time we would be around. I never surrounded myself with allot of friends but I treated him like family,he was one of the few people I trusted with my life and he tried to take it. That showed me jealousy and envy at it's truest form. I turned my life around, got a good job, winning championships,becoming well known in the boxing world with my god given talent and the hole time he was right there. But I sat back and saw that he had no ambition he was content on receiving handouts and not working. So I tried tuff love and stopped picking him up and loaning him money so he would get out and get his own. I guess that was his boiling point.
I got in an altercation with his uncle and when I turned around to leave he shot me in the back of the arm. I was shocked by the pain and sound, so I turned around to see who it was,and to my surprise it was that snake and he kept shooting. He shot me four times I almost didn't make it,but thank god I did. I went to New York to my family to heal properly. I sat back and thought if this would not have happened to me,I would be working to hard to come see my family. My cousin and I haven't seen each other in years,so we were talking about our lives and trying to catch up with the time missed,and that's when she brought to my attention what my career goal would be. If I wouldn't have gotten shot I still would be working every day all day with no GED,and no time to get one,and would have kept the dead end job that I now have; or should I say" have for now". Like I told my cousin I don't look at the bad side because the only bad side is I got shot,but so much good has come following after. I consider myself blessed I was able to wake up and see both lights;the end of my old road and the beginning of a new one. So thank god for snakes.
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Remember keep your friends close and you ENEMIES closer.. We are amazing BUT we are ONLY human. The truest form of greatness is to make all acomplishment seem effortless! Cuz those who can - Do! .. and those who can't - HATE! 143
TJ,
Wow, you're a compelling storyteller. As the reader, I didn't know how you would come back around to answering the question. You pulled it all together in the most bittersweet fashion imaginable! I would recommend letting the reader know that you intend to answer the question within the first sentences by adding something like "Belive it or not, getting shot turned out to be a positive experience for me. Let me tell you why." Also, watch out for run-on sentences throughout. Tonight, make the recommended revisions and republish the post to your blog.
See you tonight,
Adam
Hey TJ I can kind of share that type of experince some one i helped out gave them a roof over there head & food to eat some one i looked toward as i would my younger brother or as would want
others to treat my brother if some
had found my brother in the perdicament me and my sons farther
found this young man anyway i guess jelousy took over him but we
didn't have much we were only trying to survive barley enough to pay the bills at times I had just given birth to my son when we took this boy off the streets in the winter he was sleeping outside of our apartment in an old abbandoned van and we did our best to help him out ,well this same young boy tried to take me and my childs farther's life away because he felt he wanted what little we did have he laid in the bushes ambush style honestly this boy has just been released after only five years for attemp murder of not one but two individuals some one that i let occupy my home left alone to watch my newborn son while i grocery shoped tried to end my life and for nothing even afterwards i felt sorry for him dont ask me why i guess i still looked at it like that could of been my little brother in that situation . Just remmember only god knows the date and time no human detremines this the gun blew up in the youngman's hand and the police found his dna on the sawed off shot gun and still his life had only been detained from freedom for five years.
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